kuritsun: (NO THIS IS PATRICK)
牧瀬 紅莉栖 | MAKISE KURISU ([personal profile] kuritsun) wrote in [community profile] love_hmd_meme 2012-06-16 01:10 am (UTC)

SINCE YOU ARE ASKING FOR CRIT... This isn't really a matter of ic/oocness, but I do think that your writing/grammar skills could use a bit of work. It seems like you drop commas a lot where they're needed, so your tags can get a bit run-on-sentency (that's not a word but I just made it up OKAY!!) Spelling errors, too, but that's more of an individual basis thing - not anything dramatic, just stuff like separating compound words that should be one word, etc. I'm a huge spelling and grammar nazi, so I can't help but notice. weh.

I also wouldn't mind seeing more thought process and/or emotion in your tags. I've only really played with Okabe, of course, but I think he's a pretty layered character, and wouldn't mind getting to see more of what's driving him to do stuff! I'm not saying FILL UP BRACKETS OF INTROSPECTION don't be like me but you know, a little bit more. Sometimes it feels like things are happening too fast in our meme threads, considering he's a bit of a tsundere too.

but like I said up there, I think you're IC! These are just some nitpicks since I saw your plurk asking for them and I tag with you semi-often - don't let it bring you down or anything. (`・ω・´)

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